Human need to define
Categorize
Create order
Make sense of things
An illusion
Labels can hurt
Pass judgement
Define incorrectly
Send one down a bumpy road
full of pot holes and booby traps
a road of confusion and missteps
a nasty detour
on the way to discovery of
personal identity
Names can point out
flaws
better left unseen
summon inner demons
roil insecurity
Classifications
decide life
Accept?
Or defy?
Label cannot be undone
once stated
but the world can be shown
own definition
of how it really fits
This is such a worthwhile topic for a poem! Yet I must admit – and I recognize I am not feeling my best at present – I felt a little confused by your last line in the last stanza, “…but the world can be shown own definition of how it really fits.” Are you referring to how your own definition can be shown to the world?
Once again your feedback is constructive and relevant. I think this is another piece that may require some thought and editing to produce a message that can been read more clearly. Thanks, Meghan.
You’re welcome, Mary. I certainly think this poem is strong in many ways (its cadence or rhythm, strong imagery, relevant topic, insightful, and poses an interesting question). It may only need a very little polishing.